Wednesday, September 15, 2010

Swirl of Lies

While my eyes cry and search for flies
Like your never ending swirl of lies
Ogling stars glittering
Sordid pleasure tinkering
Flailing hands reach out to darkness of lightning...
Mother's lullaby, forlorn passer-by,
Drifting through mindless backgammon..
Words fear, tears jeer, faces summon-
Your eyes,
Your lies..
Your gray swirling lies...


While your eyes smile and gaze at skies
Like your tapestry of broken lies
Gray and pink teetering
Purple star slithering
Swirling lies swiveled to grim azure quivering..


Eyes and lies vie for self-less sublime
Some cries
Some lies
Some flocks of stray lies...

20 comments:

Eric Alder said...

Indeed, lies do tend to swirl together. Nice One Shot!

Monkey Man said...

Lies hurt but also make great poetry fodder. Your One Shot link took me to an old post so I clicked on your masthead to see what else you had. Glad I did.

Jingle said...

vivid word,
and lovely said.

Shashi said...

Enjoyed reading this...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya.
My one shot Wednesday submission is here...
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/08/whispers-of-desires-conflicts-and.html

dustus said...

"Ogling stars glittering
Sordid pleasure tinkering"

Nice musical quality to your poem. Enjoyed it very much and the above lines stuck in my thoughts. cheers

Sayandeep Kundu said...

@Eric Thank you :)
@Monkey Man Yes, lies do hurt....We are but all lies incarnate ourselves if not the truest ones by any chance..
@Jingle Thank you. :)
@Shashi Thanks for reading my poem..I'm gonna check out yours soon..:)
@dustus Thank you .. :)

Quintessence Of Illusion said...

it made me "hmmmm"....good one...full of symbolisms and metaphors...

Sayandeep Kundu said...

Hey sister, it's been a long time since you last commented on my post.. I feel so elated to have your comment.. it feels great you liked the symbolism in it.. thanks a lot.. But why didn't you check the penultimate one??

Sayandeep Kundu said...

Hey sister, it's been a long time since you lat commented on my post.. I feel so elated to have your comment.. it feels great you liked the symbolism in it.. thanks a lot.. But why didn't you check the penultimate one??

ninotaziz said...

I sensed suppressed anger
From lies swirling together

Excellent!

Sayandeep Kundu said...

@ninotaziz thanks a lot for this beautiful poetic analysis of my work.. :)

moondustwriter said...

I'm catching pain - the searing kind. Our world sure knows it's share of it. I know poet's words have the capacity to heal. I'm glad you can write from that raw level.

Nicely done for One Shot

Moon smiles

Pete Marshall said...

hi, i enjoyed this, like dustus said

Ogling stars glittering
Sordid pleasure tinkering

great lines....thanks for sharing with One Shot...cheers Pete

Sayandeep Kundu said...

@Moondustwriter.. Poet's words have the capacity to heal..while he himself conjures something cathartic out of it... Glad you liked it.. :)

Sayandeep Kundu said...

@Pete Marshal Thank you so very much Pete.. :)

Pulkit said...

Wow, deep and meaningful poem. Very well written.
It'd be better if you avoid ending various lines with "..."

My favorite lines would be "Flailing hands reach out to darkness of lightning...
Mother's lullaby, forlorn passer-by,
Drifting through mindless backgammon..
Words fear, tears jeer, faces summon-"
Keep writing !

Sayandeep Kundu said...

It's great that you liked it and have started following my blog.. Thank you so very much

umapoems said...

while your eyes smile and cry...you crafted the poem beautifully!

The Wandering Gypsy said...

Great one! Was this one written for a particular occasion?

Sayandeep Kundu said...

Well, one of my friends was strumming guitar the other day..and the seething turbulence of that mystic tune somewhat forced me to write these lines at once..
Regards~ Sayandeep