While my eyes cry and search for flies
Like your never ending swirl of lies
Ogling stars glittering
Sordid pleasure tinkering
Flailing hands reach out to darkness of lightning...
Mother's lullaby, forlorn passer-by,
Drifting through mindless backgammon..
Words fear, tears jeer, faces summon-
Your eyes,
Your lies..
Your gray swirling lies...
While your eyes smile and gaze at skies
Like your tapestry of broken lies
Gray and pink teetering
Purple star slithering
Swirling lies swiveled to grim azure quivering..
Eyes and lies vie for self-less sublime
Some cries
Some lies
Some flocks of stray lies...
Unfinished Business
9 years ago
20 comments:
Indeed, lies do tend to swirl together. Nice One Shot!
Lies hurt but also make great poetry fodder. Your One Shot link took me to an old post so I clicked on your masthead to see what else you had. Glad I did.
vivid word,
and lovely said.
Enjoyed reading this...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya.
My one shot Wednesday submission is here...
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/08/whispers-of-desires-conflicts-and.html
"Ogling stars glittering
Sordid pleasure tinkering"
Nice musical quality to your poem. Enjoyed it very much and the above lines stuck in my thoughts. cheers
@Eric Thank you :)
@Monkey Man Yes, lies do hurt....We are but all lies incarnate ourselves if not the truest ones by any chance..
@Jingle Thank you. :)
@Shashi Thanks for reading my poem..I'm gonna check out yours soon..:)
@dustus Thank you .. :)
it made me "hmmmm"....good one...full of symbolisms and metaphors...
Hey sister, it's been a long time since you last commented on my post.. I feel so elated to have your comment.. it feels great you liked the symbolism in it.. thanks a lot.. But why didn't you check the penultimate one??
Hey sister, it's been a long time since you lat commented on my post.. I feel so elated to have your comment.. it feels great you liked the symbolism in it.. thanks a lot.. But why didn't you check the penultimate one??
I sensed suppressed anger
From lies swirling together
Excellent!
@ninotaziz thanks a lot for this beautiful poetic analysis of my work.. :)
I'm catching pain - the searing kind. Our world sure knows it's share of it. I know poet's words have the capacity to heal. I'm glad you can write from that raw level.
Nicely done for One Shot
Moon smiles
hi, i enjoyed this, like dustus said
Ogling stars glittering
Sordid pleasure tinkering
great lines....thanks for sharing with One Shot...cheers Pete
@Moondustwriter.. Poet's words have the capacity to heal..while he himself conjures something cathartic out of it... Glad you liked it.. :)
@Pete Marshal Thank you so very much Pete.. :)
Wow, deep and meaningful poem. Very well written.
It'd be better if you avoid ending various lines with "..."
My favorite lines would be "Flailing hands reach out to darkness of lightning...
Mother's lullaby, forlorn passer-by,
Drifting through mindless backgammon..
Words fear, tears jeer, faces summon-"
Keep writing !
It's great that you liked it and have started following my blog.. Thank you so very much
while your eyes smile and cry...you crafted the poem beautifully!
Great one! Was this one written for a particular occasion?
Well, one of my friends was strumming guitar the other day..and the seething turbulence of that mystic tune somewhat forced me to write these lines at once..
Regards~ Sayandeep
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